Jesse,I think your drawing and composition are both working better. I think you tonal is too dark overall. Try to brighten the mid and background especially. The foreground can remain dark because it's an ominous and dangerous place for the character to explore. The scene is missing atmosphere and deep space. Warmer temperature colors can be used in the lit areas. More characters and ambient life around the village could help. See image below. I referenced Asher Brown Durand/ Hudson River School painters.